英語ブログの添削サービスから添削結果が返ってきました

英語ブログの添削サービスを試しています で紹介した添削サービスから添削結果が送られてきました。この文章は僕の英語ブログA Medical Student's Life in Japanに掲載したものです。

Corrected by peter @ 2006-06-24 07:53:10
I study medicine at Mie University in Japan
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I am a Japanese and study medicine at Mie University in Japan. I'm in second grade now and it takes 6 years to graduate from the school and become a doctor.

This is my photograph portrait. I asked the barber to cut my hair like Hidetoshi Nakata, very famous and a good soccer player in Japan. (view Nakata's photos by Google). Many of my friends said I looked like him. Even strangers who I passed by on the street yelled "Oh! Nakata is here!" I'm a little embarrassed to be told that but I like this hairstyle because I feel I look good with this hairstyle.

I will post about my daily school life as a medical student or what I am interested in.

Dancing all night with MONDO GROSSO'S play.

Last night I went to watch Shinichi Osawa's play. He is also called MONDO GROSSO, and I danced all night. I had not listened to his music so much, but I felt his play was really COOL! He made almost all the audience on the floor hot.

The event was held in Kobe, my hometown. People often say that there are many fashionable people in Kobe. It's true. Many of the people in the audience last night were very stylish. I wonder where such stylish people are during the day. Guess where they are during the day?

I got the answer today. Some of them are clothes shoppers. I could understand why they are such stylish people if that is so.

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Study MEDICINE. To be TOLD that. Many of the PEOPLE IN THE audience...WERE...
If THAT IS so. (peter)

赤字がこうした方がいい、と指摘された部分。意外に指摘される部分は少ないですね。なんとなく物足りない気も。4つ訂正で約500円。これを高いと見るか安いと見るかですね。世には色々な英作文添削サービスがありますが、同じ文章を添削してもらってどういう違いが出るのか興味がありますね。